Thanks for all of your kind notes last night. I deleted the posts bc I don’t want to open this app & see the “Help is available” thing. I feel better today. If nothing else, I’m proof that holding on for a new day is worth it. Not saying I’m 100%, but a bit lighter.
Narrative distance is one of those things that creeps up on me when I'm not paying attention, so one of my polishing passes is always to look for 'reporting' words.
Things like 'She saw', 'she heard', 'she felt', etc.
9/10, these phrases can be deleted, improving narrative flow and pacing.